I totally agree with all the love for the storyline(s). But what really got me here was the tone, the introversion - it's different from what I usually see in your stories, isn't it? Less dialogue, but it still flows wonderfully. You are relying more on the stuff between the lines, and especially between the lines that are *said*, I think. And it works very well, so you really should allow yourself to trust that things come through without being explicitly said (by the characters and even by you). It's really great to watch from the sidelines while you are becoming an increasingly better writer.
And it also got to me the way House really doubts himself here, that he really isn't sure if he did the right thing way back when, but he can't afford to doubt it, because it would have been *too* heartbreaking if he judged it wrong. *And* I like the fact we don't get into Wilson's head at all, that we are as unsure as House himself when it comes to what would have happened, and to what will happen now.
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Date: 2008-10-30 11:17 am (UTC)And it also got to me the way House really doubts himself here, that he really isn't sure if he did the right thing way back when, but he can't afford to doubt it, because it would have been *too* heartbreaking if he judged it wrong. *And* I like the fact we don't get into Wilson's head at all, that we are as unsure as House himself when it comes to what would have happened, and to what will happen now.
I'm psyched about following your NaNoWriMo. :)